Look Both Ways {Trifextra}

“It is the first day of November and so, today, someone will die.” 

 

Unknown caller” lit the screen.

Hmmph! That was never a good thing.

“Hello!?” she shouted, dodging a pothole.

Relieved by the hollow sound of  silence she never noticed the taxi jumping  the curb.

 

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In The Scorpio Races, author Maggie Stiefvater writes,

It is the first day of November and so, today, someone will die.”

Give us the next thirty-three words of this story, as you imagine it.

Take it wherever you like, but make it original and make it 33 words exactly.

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Kirsten is a wife after years of dating, a mom after years of infertility & a lover of shoes, words, NYC and TV dramas. A storyteller and daydreamer at heart, this is the place where her stories come to be told. Thanks for visiting.

Comments

  1. This is awesome!

  2. Great job, Kir. This is excellent! I love where you took the prompt.

  3. Ooh, tragic end…gave me a shiver.

  4. Oh wow. Love the ending. And Unknown caller is never a good thing usually.

  5. Timely, you see so many weaving while they walk and read text.

  6. Very clever, Kir! Excellent take on the prompt. :)

  7. Sneaky taxis… great piece.

  8. Oh, Kir! I think about moments like this, where another second or two either way would have made the situation come out so differently. It’s haunting to think about-but this was amazing, my friend!

  9. I love the new look of your site! Neat use of hollow sounds and potholes.

  10. This is why I never answer my phone while driving! Eeek! I hope she is okay…

  11. Distracted driving with elements of spookiness! Nice!

  12. No call is ever that important.

  13. Great response to the prompt, Kir! I love how you squeezed in foreshadowing–in 33 words! You’ve got a missing ‘d’ at the end of relieved, btw. Thanks for linking up.

  14. Holy wow! Love how you’ve created such a scary piece out of everyday actions. Even though I knew someone was going to die, that last line was a punch to my gut. Very well done, my dear friend!

  15. Oh n o!How terrible-bad idea to talk on the phone while on the road!Loved this remarkably frightening but tight piece:-)

  16. Wow! Excellent.

  17. Really well played, Kir!

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