Reservations: Trifecta

The first time I saw him; I took a breath and shared a smile.

Fate had brought us there and I was sure of my heart’s lot.

FOOL!

For while his kiss was warm, his heart ran cold.

Trifextra:

We are asking for a 33-word response to the following snippet:

The first time I saw. . .

Here’s the catch: all of your 33 words must be one syllable each. We’re going low-brow on your this week. Or not. Can you class it up under these restrictions? Give us your best.

To clarify, we are giving you 5 words. We want another 33 from you, for a grand total of 38.

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Kirsten is a wife after years of dating, a mom after years of infertility & a lover of shoes, words, NYC and TV dramas. A storyteller and daydreamer at heart, this is the place where her stories come to be told. Thanks for visiting.

Comments

  1. Oh that kiss was not much better than my fanged kiss… better be careful
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  2. It’s such a painful thing to realize that sometimes what feels like fate isn’t at all. It’s hard to let go, and hard to hang on to self respect. Once again, Kir, you brilliantly wrote about something that rang true, I’m guessing for a lot of us:) Hugs sweetie! xx
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  3. Oooh! That bites (like Bjorn said). I was such a sucker for kisses when I was young. They were very confusing and this describes why perfectly. It’s about trust and she didn’t know what was behind his. I wasn’t expecting this to go this way! HNY, girlfriend!!!
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  4. I love that last line. And I love to see you writing. Sending love, dear Kir. XO
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  5. Last line love. Perfect!
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  6. Those are the ones you have to be careful with, so you don’t get burned.
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  7. My heart has never been the best judge of character…
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  8. Wonder how many of us girls have managed to meet that fella’ along the way. Killer last line!

  9. Deceived! The moment of realization, pure misery.
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  10. Oh, those cold hearts paired with warm lips. They’ll get us every time!
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  11. Cold hearts usually have warm lips, I’ve found. Unfortunately, we can’t always see into other people’s hearts. Wouldn’t it be great if we could?
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  12. She shouldn’t be so hard on herself. We’re ALL fools for this stuff. (sigh)

  13. Cobbie's World says:

    So easy to be attracted but, so difficult to find the proper connection. Better to realize too soon than too late, I suppose. Good, thoughtful post. Thanks. :)

  14. I love the interruption of the word “FOOL!” and how it really makes the reader halt in what they’re thinking. Really nice!
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  15. Alas! So sad. The lines are beautiful!

  16. This is great work.

  17. It’s so painful to go through, but kind of amazing still to retain that hopeful heart on the next go round.
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  18. Ugh! Who hasn’t been dealt this blow? The worst is when you KNOW it’s coming, you know he’s not “the one,” yet you still let yourself fall. The best is finally meeting “the one” and being able to laugh about the loser(s) you once let in.

    I love how relatable your words are. You write our hearts and minds Lovely work, my sweet. XO
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