Press Repeat : The Love Story of Kimmy & David Chapter 9 {Write On Edge/Studio30Plus}

 

 

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Lost in each other Kimmy and David squinted into the blinding sunlight as they exited the theater.

But as David reached for Kimmy’s hand she froze. Unsure, she let him take it but it was a stiff offering.

David held tight, “You okay?”

“I’m fine.” she answered, allowing her fingers to slowly relax inside his. “It’s just feels weird to be holding your hand.”

“Weird?” David frowned, pretending to be hurt.

“Yeah. Weird.” You never held my hand when we, um, when we were…” Kimmy’s face flamed as she tried to explain what they had been to each other.

“I know.” David sighed, bringing her hand to his lips and placing a gentle kiss between her knuckles. “But that was a long time ago.”

There was a pause as their foreheads touched.

“David…?” Kimmy whispered.

“Hmm? “He answered. His mouth was dangerously close.

“…What made you call? The other night, you sounded drunk, I mean, I think you were drunk. So if you didn’t really mean any of it … “she heard her voice sputter.  

 David shifted, raking the hand that wasn’t holding hers through his hair and then gently trailing it down the side of her face. “I meant every word. I know I was drunk, but the things I said? I couldn’t be more serious.”

Kimmy’s breath caught in her throat as tears spilled down her cheeks. Her shoulders heaved, “You made me feel unlovable.”

“Unlovable?” David’s eyes clouded as if he’s heard her wrong. “You’re the least unlovable person I know.”

“But…”

“I never said it.” David admitted,” I don’t think I knew. Or maybe I did, but I thought you and I were too different to last. I’m not sure I even wanted to feel that way about you or anyone else but then you left, and I was… well, I was…” he searched for a word, “… surprised.”

“Surprised?”

“Yeah. I was surprised when you left. Then I found your letter.” He paused, drawing a deep breath. “It took a long time to realize how much I’d hurt you. ”
“I’m sorry…”

“Don’t be. It was your way of telling me stuff I didn’t want to hear. You know I’ve carried that letter around for the  past two years?”

Reaching into his back pocket, he slowly unfolded the two sheets of lined paper that she had poured her heart out onto. Blue ink had seeped into the creases and they spoke of it being handled over and over again, folded and refolded, as if it held the answers to a mystery.

“See?” David said, offering it to her but even as her hand came up to grasp it, she didn’t need to; she remembered every bitter word she’d written.

You don’t love me.”

Anger and frustration had poured out of her.

I mean nothing to you and it’s tearing me apart!

Desperation had threatened to swallow her alive.

I only want to be with you, please stop pushing me away.”

She shuttered as she remembered how the words had simply tumbled out of her but she hardly recognized the girl who had written the last line, “I HATE you! I wish I’d never met you!”

She swallowed the memory of the pen channeling her emotion, almost ripping the paper, as she scrawled her name to the bottom of the page.

Kimmy’s handled the flimsy paper, careful not to tear it along its worn seams. Her voice came out so soft David had to lean in to hear her, “I can’t believe you kept it.

David tipped her chin with his finger, “Sometimes I wish we could go back, so you never had to write it.”

“Me too.” she sighed, forcing a weak, watery smile. “But that was then and this is…”

“…Now.” He finished and kissed her, both of them completely unaware Marco was watching from across the parking lot.

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It’s been a while, but it feels good to be writing again.

I saw the prompts from WRITE AT THE MERGE and decided to “kill my babies” with this piece.

I ripped the original apart and came up with something I like a lot better.

“The past is a foreign country: they do things differently there.”
~ L. P. Hartley: The Go-Between (1953)

Image courtesy of Unsplash.

Image courtesy of Unsplash.

also my good friend Marie is back and playing with prompts with
STUDIO 30 Plus

the prompt of “TIME” seems to fit so well here.

 

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Kirsten is a wife after years of dating, a mom after years of infertility & a lover of shoes, words, NYC and TV dramas. A storyteller and daydreamer at heart, this is the place where her stories come to be told. Thanks for visiting.

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  1. Lyssa Medana
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    This is such a sad story, I hope that they make it. LM x

  2. This is lovely! Now the question is… does changing this scene change anything else? DOMINOES I tell you :)
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    • kpiccini@weichertrealtors.net says:

      it doesn’t..it just tightens it up. Marco had always seen them in them in parking lot, but I took a lot of the “fluff” out of this scene. Made David accountable in a way he wasn’t before…so that when Kimmy goes to Italy, well the Sh** is really going to hit the fan.
      I’m hoping this story really lights it’s own fire (and mine) soon.
      :)

  3. I’m so glad to see you writing and sharing this story again. XO
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  4. Welcome back Kimmy!

  5. Great to read your writing again, Kir! I need to go back and read the previous installments about Kimmy and David. oxox.
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  6. Kir,this love story made me want to cry and smile at the same time-no one does romance beeter than you!Loved it my friend :-)

  7. Kir, I really enjoyed this. You did a great job with the dialogue — I was eating up as fast as my eyes could take it in. You gave me just enough back story to “get” Kimmy’s hesitation, but you definitely nailed making David more certain about his commitment and why he was so:~)

    I hope they’ll be more of this story!
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  8. Kimmy and David in progress! All very good things. Very good.
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  9. I really connected with this story. I’ve occasionally gone through some of the things I’ve written years ago and blushed and thought, “Who WAS that girl who wrote this?” It’ll be interesting to see where this lead!
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  10. This illustrated the prompt SO well! I love how the two of them have moved into a place where the people they were are no longer recognizable. I like to think that love pulls people together even if they’ve grown apart, and you’ve written me a piece that rings true to my heart.

  11. To have a second chance, and make amends to each other… an intriguing idea. I’m enjoying watching this story play out.
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  12. I am definitely going to have to come back and read more of this story. I love the scene you paint. The warring emotions are perfect. And what about Marco? I need to know more about why he appears to be stalking them in this scene.
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  13. Oh you did it again! You wrapped me and held me tight all the way to the killer and unexpected ending. I love that you’re a sappy romantic (like me).
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  14. I was just thinking last week about this story. I was happy to see you wrote another part to it. But how could you leave the end hanging like that? :) Please tell me I won’t have to wait another month or two to see what happens with Marco!
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  15. Just getting caught-up. Love these characters! Nice job, as always.
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