Jog {Gargleblaster: Yeah Write}

Never.

(by choice)

It’s the mention here or her name whispered there that stills my breath, reminds me.

All those memories misshapen (by my own hand)

to eradicate her from my

(better now!) life

help until

I close my eyes…

She’s everywhere.

 

 

 

Week #3 of the GargleBlaster (YAY)

at Yeah Write and Christine’s prompts are just getting better and better.
Have you joined in yet?

42 words (no more or less) for : 
Do you see her much?

So divine for the hopeless romantics like me. 

(and did you hear? I got Editor’s Pick last week with “Soup’s On!” 

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About Kir

Kirsten is a wife after years of dating, a mom after years of infertility & a lover of shoes, words, NYC and TV dramas. A storyteller and daydreamer at heart, this is the place where her stories come to be told. Thanks for visiting.

Comments

  1. Once again, you set the bar way up high. You really brought home the narrator’s angst!

    I will be back to my regular creative writing attempts once April is past. I may even try a few new ones!
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    • I am REALLY enjoying your A-Z posts, I read every single one and I think I’m going to comment on 10 at a time…but I love the way you write and think and share. THANK you for doing that.

      and I can’t wait to see you back on the grids, I’ve missed those “stories” too.

  2. I like the asides, it gives a peek into a darker meaning to your words.
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    • I actually heard this one…does that make sense?
      Heard the voice saying it, (I was watching the last The Good Wife and hearing Will talk about Alicia. Love is complicated)

      thank you for reading! Hope you had a good weekend.

  3. How do you do that? Bring in that twin voice so effortlessly! One of my favourites thus far on the grid :)
    Shailaja V recently shared…Do you see her much?~ Fiction (42 words)My Profile

    • good morning!
      I don’t think I do anything effortlessly..and to have you say that makes me smile (and almost not believe it.)

      thank you so much for taking the time to visit, comment and give me a little sunshine today. I appreciate it very much.

  4. Intriguing. :-)

  5. Despite our best efforts, memories rarely just fade quietly into the past… this describes well how they just bubble up and eat up the silence (and our peace!)
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  6. Oh Kir you do this so very beautifully! You are talented! I love the two voices, and misshapen memories… the last line is great, too.. i love it all, actually!
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  7. Hey, same last line as me! Nice job!
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  8. People stay with us far longer than their physical presence has gone. The asides add so much to this! As always, a contender!

  9. Hmm, I wonder if you came at this from the same place I did….?
    Jennifer Hall recently shared…She is GoneMy Profile

    • well I’m not sure. I wrote it very quickly Sunday morning, in the shower and just tried to get it all down before I forgot it or allowed myself too much time to think about it.

      although the theme, I think, will part of many people’s writes this week. That a memory is hard to rid yourself of

  10. I love your shorts. The stuff you’ve been churning out, especially lately, have been really, really top grade. Its no wonder to me that you got Editors Choice for Soups On. I think that might be on of my favorites.
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  11. Great poem, Kir! I loved the line “All those memories misshapen (by my own hand)” – it’s got a great lilt to it. And the ending is like a rush of cold water. Thanks for linking it up! (And congrats on your well-deserved editor’s pick last week!)
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  12. Oh I like this, Kir. So much story in just 42 words.
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  13. Oh,such a heart breaking thing not to be able to eradicate someone from one’s memory though one keeps telling oneself all sorts of lies-like life being better now,eh?That last line was a killer Kir and I just loved the line,”All those memories misshapen (by my own hand)”-wow!
    Atreyee recently shared…Do you see her much?My Profile

    • HI Atreyee,
      I don’t think we every lose (or forget) the people who meant something to us. Even when we work hard at doing it.

      so glad you liked that line, it seems to have resonated with a lot of folks and that blows me away. THANK YOU. xo

  14. The line, “All those memories misshapen (by my own hand)” stood out for me too. This is wonderful. You speak volumes with your 42 words.
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    • Tam
      thank you. That line was written and rewritten and I took a walk, saying it out loud..wondering if it worked. But I guess it did because so many people liked it. I am so thankful for the visit and that you found something here you enjoyed.

  15. Love this, Kir.
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  16. I really like this but am failing to pin down why – sorry for the useless comment. Maybe it’s the (unvoiced) leading me to wonder what has happened/ how your protagonist got to his/ her better life. And the last line opens up a whole other set of questions. I do like being made to think!

    • Best kind of comment. Thank you for leaving it here.
      I understand, it’s hard to pin down what it is about jogging a memory that hurts or aches or just plain bothers you.

      I was trying to speak from the voice of someone feeling like “I’m better off without ..her/him/it/etc” and yet the truth is that we are never really free of the people we love or of the emotions that overtake us about those people.

      Like I said, I really love knowing that this made you think and brought up emotions and questions. It’s the reason we write, isn’t it? To pull all those feelings to the surface.

      you made my day. THANK YOU.

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