Without You {Gargleblaster: Yeah Write}

four years

three  months

two weeks

one day

and the clouds have ceased their chase of one another,

while the bullfrogs down on the bayou are struck dumb.

Seems the whole world’s gone silent,

save for the lonesome ticking of my heart.



The Yeah Write

Gargleblaster this week:

Suggested by Erica M, and comes from Alice Munro’s short story A Real Life.

Have all your clocks stopped?

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About Kir

Kirsten is a wife after years of dating, a mom after years of infertility & a lover of shoes, words, NYC and TV dramas. A storyteller and daydreamer at heart, this is the place where her stories come to be told. Thanks for visiting.


  1. Kir, this was sweet and reminded me of the Speakeasy prompt using Love in the Time of Cholera. Last line ties it all together.

  2. This was beautiful.. that line line was amazing… my heart definitely ticks to this one :-)

  3. I like the combination of silence and the counting of days. It makes this piece very haunting. Karen

  4. “the lonesome ticking of my heart” – how familiar is that… great take, Kir, as always dear.

  5. wow, girl. beautiful and so emotional.
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  6. Haunting is a great word. What does the time passing signify? Is it the time since a lover left. Lovely with such bittersweet tones. You choose beautiful words always. XO

  7. I liked the countdown and the silent bulldog. It made the ending so much lonelier.
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  8. loved the clouds the bullfrogs and the last line – powerful and inspring

  9. So beautiful, Kir. Love the ticking off of time. Perfect.
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  10. Beautiful Kir esp. the last line.
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  11. This was beautiful. It was very heart-rending.

    God bless you,
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  12. Lovely and poignant!
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  13. You can craft such poignant pieces in so few words. So many feels…
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  14. beautifully descriptive and emotional.
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  15. This is beautiful, so very emotive, evoking pictures of blue skies, white fluffy clouds and natures creatures, yet tinged with a touch of sadness.
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  16. Great 42!

  17. Lovely, Kir! Every word was perfectly placed. Great images, great phrasing – just wonderful. Thanks so much for sharing it.
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  18. This is my favorite line:

    while the bullfrogs down on the bayou are struck dumb.
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  19. As always very evocative Kir and the last line is simply brilliant!
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  20. I pictured a woman sitting on the bank of a pond, listening, while I read this. Beautifully done!
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  21. Beautiful. I can still hear those frogs :-)
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  22. My heart stopped because you captured it here with your words.
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  23. Lonesome ticking of my heart….that’ll always get me!
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  24. Fantastic wording in this piece.


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